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Whistle for the Choir Re-Write by ~Wyvern709:iconWyvern709:



Well here’s a big, big city
And the lights are all down
Not the best time
To meet a man of the town

I may be a beggar
Or so it would seem
I’m not well off
But I’m overly keen
Oh it’s two, O’clock
And I’m with a pretty girl in a pretty frock

So if you’re lonely
Oh you’re not the only
Such a silly girl
Just let, me try
You caught, my eye
A girl like you is just irresistible

Well it’s a big, big city
And I’m walking alone
With all the ghosts of dead drinkers
Not wearing a frown

I ain’t scared
I’m walking tall
But they say that pride always comes before a fall
And it’s you
Oh you
You’ve got me brave and crazy with those things you do

And if you’re crazy?
I don’t care, simply amazing
But you’re a silly girl
Give me a chance
This dance
And I’ll show you the world
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Author's Comments

I decided I'd try my hand at re-writing a full song to see how it came out. For those that know it, you'll be able to tell the difference, for those who don't, here's a link to the song ([link]) and lyrics ([link])

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:iconcleril:
I like how you change up the flow in the third lyric. Kept everything clean and fresh. I generally liked the optimistic tone presented, even though most things were saddening. Very cheery even, the tone. The messages were also interesting and thought out. Presented in a unique way as well.

In short, great job.

In long, look up.
:iconmieeno:
like it, it's kind of snapy

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